Write essay2 draft1 and email it to me by Friday. Bring it to class.
Distribution of Essay 1 Class Collection (for those who asked for it)
Apologies to those of you who asked for one and did not receive: I printed them Thursday night and ran out of ink before I finished. I will bring the remaining copies next week.
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Textbook p. 50, practice 5
p. 51, read C “Offering a solution”
p. 53. Your turn – write your outline
if necessary, re-write your thesis statement
Hooks are not strictly necessary for pure academic essays, but good hooks attract readers, so hook-writing is a very useful skill. Gary North has been writing articles, headlines and hooks for many years. Here is a recent sample. Do they make you want to read more?
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Write a simple 5-paragraph (or more) response essay to this video clip below.
Your introductory paragraph must include a short summary of the episode, the main lessons it teaches about English study and about life, and whether you agree with those lessons or not and why.
The other paragraphs should deal with the main lessons that you select from the video.
Use the English subtitles for quoting directly from the video, or use paraphrasing.
Finally, cite the original source. The URL is https://youtu.be/AEnO6uYMX4g
Use this format for the citation but without the parentheses: “(Name of video).” YouTube, uploaded by (name of uploader), 6 June 2016 (date uploaded), www.youtube.com/watch?v=WBlpjSEtELs (URL, see above or visit YouTube).
Re-write your second draft response to one of the two essays in the Appendix to the textbook pp. 162-165. This will be your final version. Print out and bring to class next Friday (Dec. 4th). If you will be absent next class, please email it to me.
A “response essay” is NOT a 感想文.
You are not writing mainly about the topic (violent video games or homework). You are writing about the article (either the Amanda Shaffer one, or the Alfie Kohn one).
First, you need to take a position for or against the article (not the topic), and write your position clearly in the first paragraph.
summarizethe article’s main points and give your response to each together with your reasons why you agree (or disagree) with the points in the article.
E.g.,you disagree because
the facts in the article are false (e.g. “It is not true that capitalism is responsible for the increasing income inequality. Instead, capitalism is responsible for overall growth in income and wealth; income inequality is partly a natural phenomenon because people are not equal, but it is made worse by the policies of government and central banks.”
or because the argument is weak (e.g. “Automation does cause some job losses, but it also creates new jobs that did not exist before. For example, cars and trains automated long-distance travel by replacing horses. Many jobs related to horses were lost (e.g. horse farmers, horse trainers, horse riders, etc.). However, many new jobs were created by automation, e.g. car and train drivers and mechanics, factory workers, engineers, designers, etc. To say that automation destroys jobs is therefore a weak argument.”)
or because the writer does not provide enough evidence, e.g. “The writer says that the government knows exactly where the dictator has stocks of dangerous weapons, but does not give the exact locations.”)
or because the evidence is weak (e.g. “The author says that ‘research link[s] violent video games to increased aggression’ (162), but the research does not show a clear link, it only ‘suggests’ that ‘violent video games may be more likely to’ lead to aggressive behaviour. It may, but also it may not. The evidence does not support the author’s claim.”)
Your reasons should include as many objective facts as possible.
Your personal belief is not an argument. Simply stating your belief is not persuasive and should not be used in an academic essay.
In groups of 4 or 5, read each others’ essays.
Hand in your second draft of your “Response essay”.