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AW2: Week 8, November 22nd, 2019


  • Re-read the essays handed out in class today (you can download them below).
  • Watch the videos about citations and references if you have not yet done so.
  • Re-write your draft #3, save as “AW2 Essay4 Draft4 LastName” (without the ” of course”), and send it to me by email. The email should have the same subject line “AW2 Essay4 Draft4 LastName”.
  • Print it out and bring to class next week.
  • NEW! Checklist for your draft #4:
    • Does your title and thesis statement clearly show your position on the topic?
    • Do you have a clear thesis statement?
    • Have you done some research and found at least two articles or websites – one that supports your position and one that supports the opposite opinion? 
      • Have you listed both articles in your “Works Cited” section and referred to them in the body of your essay (in-text citation)?
      • Have you used the correct (MLA) format for each one? See this model MLA-style essay for examples. [wpdm_package id=’1824′]
    • Have you avoided rhetorical questions? (E.g. “Do you like to read books?”)
    • Have you avoided using subjective expressions? (E.g., “I think the 2020 Olympics will be good for Japan.”
    • Have you included objective facts as evidence to support your claims (position and opinions)?
    • Have you included references for all these pieces of evidence (i.e. have you cited all your sources)?
    • Does your conclusion restate your position and summarize your main points?

Today’s class

  1. Brief discussion of citations and references (see last week’s homework)
  2. Wrong logic [wpdm_package id=’1830′]
  3. In small groups, discuss the key main points of the following essays (click the titles below to download the essay)
    1. Tips on How to Write an Argumentative Essay [wpdm_package id=’1808′]
    2. 5 Steps to Writing a Position Paper [wpdm_package id=’1810′]
    3. Refutation [wpdm_package id=’1812′]
    4. Usage and Examples of a Rebuttal [wpdm_package id=’1814′]
    5. An Introduction to Academic Writing (essay + discussion questions) [wpdm_package id=’1816′]

AW1: Week 8, June 7th, 2019

  1. Read the sample essay in the textbook pp. 43-4.
  2. Write out the title and source information for the essay that you discussed in class today,
    1. for the original essay
    2. for the Japanese translation (if you used one)
    3. using the MLA format and email it to me as an attachment by Wednesday midnight. Save the document as “AW1 Essay Citation Your Name” and use the same for the subject line of your email. Everything should be in Roman characters. No Chinese characters.
      1. essay in a book: Last name, First name. “Title of Essay.” Title of Collection, edited by Editor’s Name(s), Publisher, Year, Page range of entry.
      2. a translation, e.g.: Foucault, Michel. Madness and Civilization: A History of Insanity in the Age of Reason. Translated by Richard Howard, Vintage-Random House, 1988.
      3. A page on a web site: For an individual page on a Web site, list the author or alias if known, followed by an indication of the specific page or article being referenced. Usually, the title of the page or article appears in a header at the top of the page. Follow this with the information covered above for entire Web sites. If the publisher is the same as the website name, only list it once. E.g.:
        1. “Athlete’s Foot – Topic Overview.” WebMD, 25 Sept. 2014, www.webmd.com/skin-problems-and-treatments/tc/athletes-foot-topic-overview.
        2. Lundman, Susan. “How to Make Vegetarian Chili.” eHow, www.ehow.com/how_10727_make-vegetarian-chili.html. Accessed 6 July 2015.
        3. From Purdue Online Writing Lab https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/

      Today’s class

      • Group discussions of the essays read for last week’s homework.
      • Sentence-correction and analysis

AW2: WEEK 8, NOVEMBER 30TH, 2018


  • Re-write your response to something you feel strongly about. Or you may write a new one on a different topic.
    • Be sure to include the “work cited” information in the correct format. See the Overview here: bit.ly/OWL_MLA4aw2

Today’s class

  1. An overview of the MLA style for citations. Today’s handout was taken from this website:  bit.ly/OWL_MLA4aw2
  2. Read the article about homework on pages164-5 of the textbook.
  3. Copy a sample response-essay introductory paragraph.
    1. The introductory paragraph must include
      1. a summary of the original source (article, song, movie, book, etc)
      2. an initial reference to the original source
      3. a short statement of your feelings about it.

AW2: WEEK 8, December 1st, 2017


Read the sample essay on pp 113-4 and the “Privacy” essay in the Appendix, pp. 159-161.

(Send me your essay #4 final draft, if you have not already done so.)

Today’s class

  1. To think like a Westerner, practice asking (and answering) yourself “why?”
  2. Topic sentence worksheet – rewrite
  3. Connected sentence-writing
    1. Analysis
  4. Essay #5 – Response essay – is due Dec. 22nd.
  5. Essay #6 – Timed essays – are to be done in class in January
  6. To pass this class, you must complete 3 essays this semester of  a satisfactory quality.
  7. Read the first paragraph of the sample essay on p. 113
  8. Write a similar paragraph in response to today’s reading about GMOs, including the “Works cited”.

AW1, Week 8, June 9th, 2017


  • (Email me your final draft if you have not already done so.)
  • Look again at the “Slip or Trip?” handout.
  1. Write out the list of evidence: what can you see in the picture that might be important to prove or disprove Queenie’s claim about what happened?
  2. Explain why each piece of evidence is important, i.e. explain why each piece of evidence supports or does not support Queenie’s claim.
  3. What is YOUR claim about what happened? Explain your reasons, i.e. support with evidence (listed in step 2 above).

Today’s class

  1. Common errors from students’ 3rd draft (download the document here: AW1 Common errors from Essay 1 )
  2. Look at the handout “Slip or Trip?”
    1. What is Queenie’s claim about what happened?
    2. What is the evidence (what can you see in the picture that might be relevant)?
      1. The autopsy report (not in the picture) says that Arthur died of a wound on the head and that he had been drunk.
      2. List the other pieces of evidence.
    3. Now link the evidence to Queenie’s claim with explanations about why it supports or does not support Queenie’s claim about what happened to Arthur.
      1. E.g. Evidence: Arthur is still holding an unbroken glass in his hand. When people slip and fall (Queenie’s claim), they usually drop what they are holding and try to stop themselves falling by grasping something solid. So if Arthur had fallen, the glass would not be still in his hand. The fact that it is in his hand does not support Queenie’s claim. Also, being made of glass, it is quite likely to have broken, but it is not broken. These two pieces of evidence do not support Queenie’s claim. However, they do not prove that Queenie is lying, nor do they prove how Arthur received his head wound. So we need more evidence and more reasoning.

Academic Writing I, week 8: June 10th, 2016


If you are interested in any of these books, you can have them for 100 yen. Send me an email and I will bring the book(s) to class next week.

  1.  SOLD! Click here to visit this item’s Amazon Japan page   売りました!新品はこちらへどうぞー>
    「グローバル化時代の大学論2 – イギリスの大学・ニッポンの大学 – カレッジ、チュートリアル、エリート教育 (中公新書ラクレ)」
  2. File 2016-06-12 22 37 12English translation of Natsume Soseki’s novel “Bottchan”
  3. File 2016-06-12 22 36 48and “I am a Cat”.


  • Choose a topic from the list on p. 46.
  • Read Practice 3 (p. 46-7) and write a similar passage about your chosen topic.
    • Bring it to class next week (June 17th).
  • Read the Format checklist (download it here: Academic Writing checklist
  • If necessary, re-format your essay,  make any other changes you wish, print it out and bring it to class next week.
  • If you have not done so already, please email me your final essay as soon as possible.
    • Use the following format for your file name: AW1_Essay1_Final_<Family Name>
    • Please send as a Word document (not pdf).

Today’s class

  1. Read the textbook chapter 2, pages 42-44.
  2. Read the sample essay.
  3. Answer the questions in Practice 1 on looseleaf paper (if you did not hand in your paper, please do so noext week June 17th).
  4. Textbook p. 45 Practice 2 (in your textbook).
  5. Choose a topic from the list on p. 46.
  6. Read Practice 3 (p. 46-7)

Academic Writing II, week 8: November 20th, 2015


  • Write a second draft response to one of the two essays in the Appendix to the textbook pp. 162-165. (Unless you have a good reason, I strongly suggest you keep to the same essay you wrote about in your first draft.)
    • A “response essay” is NOT a 感想文.
    • You need to take a position (for or against),
    • summarize the article’s main points and give your response to each,
    • provide objective facts as evidence to support your reasons why you agree (or disagree).
  • Bring it to class next Friday (Nov. 27th).
  • If you did not finish today’s classwork (see below) during class time, please finish for homework.

Today’s class:

  1. Hand in your first draft of your “Response essay”.
  2. Read the sample academic reading #5 “False Flag operations“, and answer the questions:
    1. What is a “false flag” operation? Explain in your own words.
    2. Explain how a false flag operation uses ” the guise of fighting a foreign enemy”.
    3. What started the Spanish-American war of 1898? Why does the author refer to this as an intelligence “failure” (with qutoation marks)?
    4. What other incidents might be called false flag operations?
    5. Textbook:
      1. read page 118 D
      2. page 120 E and practice 5
      3. page 121 F and practice 6

Academic Writing I, week 8: June 5th, 2015


  1. Re-write the first and last paragraphs of your Essay1 (Rewrite) to match your new,  argumentative thesis statement which you wrote in class today.
  2. Read the sample essay in the textbook, chapter 2.

Makeup class for May 1st will be July 11. Time and place will be announced later.

Today’s class:

  1. Today’s class focused on
    1. thesis statement, and
    2. using evidence to support claims.

Thesis Statement

A thesis statement is a sentence that states your main argument

  1. It must be
    • argumentative
    • capable of advancement or development.
    • concise
    • supported
    1. The purpose of my paper is to discuss dark chocolate.
    2. My paper will explore dark chocolate.
    1 is a purpose statement, but not a thesis statement because it is not argumentative and not capable of advancement. It is concise, but not supported.
    3. In this paper I argue that dark chocolate has more positive benefits than other types of chocolates.
    4. My discussion shows that dark chocolate contributes to people’s happiness and satisfaction.
    Which thesis statement is argumentative?
    1. In his article, Jefferson (2003) insisted that social media was responsible for corrupting the mind of America’s high school students.
    2. Social media can create distractions for high school students as they focus on talking with their friends rather than their studies.
    3. The purpose of this paper is to consider the positive and negative ways that social media affects high school students.


TASK: Re-write the thesis statement of your Essay 1 Rewrite to be argumentative.

Using evidence

Statements in academic writing need to be supported by factual details. You will need to support your claims with adequate evidence.

What kind of evidence can be used?

  • numbers
  • facts
  • examples
  • personal experience (including your own, but also that of others)
  • quotations

TASK: What kind of evidence could you use in your new, argumentative essay? List the types of evidence you might need.

Evidence is the support you give for your statements and arguments. In academic writing, there are strict rules about the evidence you use. You must acknowledge another’s intellectual material every time you use it—words (e.g. single words, phrases, sentences, paragraphs); graphic material (e.g. tables, diagrams, drawings); multimedia sources (e.g. videos, CD-ROMS, Internet).

TASK: Look at handout #1. (You can download handout #1 here: How_to_work_out_less_edt  )

  • Is this argumentative writing, or explanatory?
  • What is the meaning of the blue words?
  • If you click on them, what kind of page do you think you will be taken to?

TASK: Look at handout #2. (You can download handout #2 here: Is_Your_Doctor_Harming_You_edt  )

  • Where is the hook?
  • What kind of page do you think you will be taken to if yo click on the hyperlink in the first paragraph beneath the title?
  • Why does that first paragraph provide all this detail?



Academic Writing I, week 8: June 6th, 2014


Write the complete first draft of your problem-solution essay. Write it by hand or type it and print it out and bring it to next week’s class.

Today’s class:

  1. Sheffner’s principles of academic writing:
    1. the reader is not interested in you – avoid writing essays where you are the focus
    2. give value to the reader – a fresh point of view, a new or different insight, an original thought or idea, some new information of  interest or value to the reader, something funny or moving.
    3. write about universals, and avoid local topics – write about matters which are common to educated human beings everywhere. Essays such as “My Trip to Okinawa” or “How to do Bonsai” may be interesting, but no-one will read them!
    4. New!! Be as accurate and as truthful as possible – be careful with your statements. “Smoking causes cancer” means smoking always causes cancer, which is not true. Instead, write, “Smoking may cause cancer.”
  2. Read the blue paragrapn (Practice 5), p. 50.
    1. Which two sentences tells you the problem?
    2. Which sentence tells you the solution?
  3. Write your introductory paragraph.
  4. P. 54 F
  5. Read p. 56, B
  6. P. 58, C and Practice 10.
  7. Write the rest of your essay.