Write out the title and source information for the essay that you discussed in class today,
for the original essay
for the Japanese translation (if you used one)
using the MLA format and email it to me as an attachment by Wednesday midnight. Save the document as “AW1 Essay Citation Your Name” and use the same for the subject line of your email. Everything should be in Roman characters. No Chinese characters.
essay in a book: Last name, First name. “Title of Essay.” Title of Collection, edited by Editor’s Name(s), Publisher, Year, Page range of entry.
a translation, e.g.: Foucault, Michel. Madness and Civilization: A History of Insanity in the Age of Reason. Translated by Richard Howard, Vintage-Random House, 1988.
A page on a web site: For an individual page on a Web site, list the author or alias if known, followed by an indication of the specific page or article being referenced. Usually, the title of the page or article appears in a header at the top of the page. Follow this with the information covered above for entire Web sites. If the publisher is the same as the website name, only list it once. E.g.:
What is the evidence (what can you see in the picture that might be relevant)?
The autopsy report (not in the picture) says that Arthur died of a wound on the head and that he had been drunk.
List the other pieces of evidence.
Now link the evidence to Queenie’s claim with explanations about why it supports or does not support Queenie’s claim about what happened to Arthur.
E.g. Evidence: Arthur is still holding an unbroken glass in his hand. When people slip and fall (Queenie’s claim), they usually drop what they are holding and try to stop themselves falling by grasping something solid. So if Arthur had fallen, the glass would not be still in his hand. The fact that it is in his hand does not support Queenie’s claim. Also, being made of glass, it is quite likely to have broken, but it is not broken. These two pieces of evidence do not support Queenie’s claim. However, they do not prove that Queenie is lying, nor do they prove how Arthur received his head wound. So we need more evidence and more reasoning.
Write a second draft response to one of the two essays in the Appendix to the textbook pp. 162-165. (Unless you have a good reason, I strongly suggest you keep to the same essay you wrote about in your first draft.)
A “response essay” is NOT a 感想文.
You need to take a position (for or against),
summarize the article’s main points and give your response to each,
provide objective facts as evidence to support your reasons why you agree (or disagree).
Bring it to class next Friday (Nov. 27th).
If you did not finish today’s classwork (see below) during class time, please finish for homework.
Hand in your first draft of your “Response essay”.
Re-write the first and last paragraphs of your Essay1 (Rewrite) to match your new, argumentative thesis statement which you wrote in class today.
Read the sample essay in the textbook, chapter 2.
Makeup class for May 1st will be July 11. Time and place will be announced later.
Today’s class focused on
thesis statement, and
using evidence to support claims.
A thesis statement is a sentence that states your main argument
It must be
capable of advancement or development.
The purpose of my paper is to discuss dark chocolate.
My paper will explore dark chocolate.
1 is a purpose statement, but not a thesis statement because it is not argumentative and not capable of advancement. It is concise, but not supported.
3. In this paper I argue that dark chocolate has more positive benefits than other types of chocolates.
4. My discussion shows that dark chocolate contributes to people’s happiness and satisfaction.
Which thesis statement is argumentative?
In his article, Jefferson (2003) insisted that social media was responsible for corrupting the mind of America’s high school students.
Social media can create distractions for high school students as they focus on talking with their friends rather than their studies.
The purpose of this paper is to consider the positive and negative ways that social media affects high school students.
TASK: Re-write the thesis statement of your Essay 1 Rewrite to be argumentative.
Statements in academic writing need to be supported by factual details. You will need to support your claims with adequate evidence.
What kind of evidence can be used?
personal experience (including your own, but also that of others)
TASK: What kind of evidence could you use in your new, argumentative essay? List the types of evidence you might need.
Evidence is the support you give for your statements and arguments. In academic writing, there are strict rules about the evidence you use. You must acknowledge another’s intellectual material every time you use it—words (e.g. single words, phrases, sentences, paragraphs); graphic material (e.g. tables, diagrams, drawings); multimedia sources (e.g. videos, CD-ROMS, Internet).
Write the complete first draft of your problem-solution essay. Write it by hand or type it and print it out and bring it to next week’s class.
Sheffner’s principles of academic writing:
the reader is not interested in you – avoid writing essays where you are the focus
give value to the reader – a fresh point of view, a new or different insight, an original thought or idea, some new information of interest or value to the reader, something funny or moving.
write about universals, and avoid local topics – write about matters which are common to educated human beings everywhere. Essays such as “My Trip to Okinawa” or “How to do Bonsai” may be interesting, but no-one will read them!
New!! Be as accurate and as truthful as possible – be careful with your statements. “Smoking causes cancer” means smoking always causes cancer, which is not true. Instead, write, “Smoking may cause cancer.”