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AW1: WEEK 10, JUNE 21st, 2019

Homework

  • Write the introduction and conclusion for your essay #2 (problem-solution)
  • Be sure to include the problem and why it is a problem, e.g. state the consequences, as in the 2013 student essay which you can see here.
  • Remember, the conclusion should basically repeat the information in the introduction. No new information in the conclusion!
  • Write it by hand or type it, and bring it to class to show to classmates next Friday.

Today’s class

  • Freewriting: how was your week? Mine was pretty stressful and I was feeling tired all week, including today’s class. 🙁
  • Read the first two paragraphs (again) of Swift’s satirical essay “A Modest Proposal”.
    • Notice how he describes the problem, but does not explain the consequences (this is not an academic essay, so he does not have to!)
  • Write the introduction for your essay #2 (problem-solution).
  • In groups of 5-6, read each other’s writing and give feedback: is the problem (and consequences) clearly stated? Are you convinced it is a real problem?
  • Read the introduction of a problem-solution essay written by a 2013 AW1 student.
  • Re-write your introduction if necessary.


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AW2: Week 10, December 14th, 2018

Homework

  • Choose a controversial topic and find two articles on this topic with opposing or different points of view: one article “for” and one “against”. (The original articles may be in either English or Japanese, but of course your response must be in English).
  • summarize in one paragraph the main arguments in each article.
  • DO NOT WRITE YOUR OPINION.
  • List the articles you used in your “works cited” list, using the appropriate MLA format
  • Email it to me by Friday Dec. 21st.
  • Print it out and bring it to class Friday Dec. 21st
  • (Dec. 21st will be the last class of 2018.)

Today’s class

Announcement

I added a new page: Class Collections. You can download the Essay#4 class collection PDF from here: https://www.sheffnersweb.net/blogs/classblogs/kpu/class-collections/


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AW1: Week 10, June 29th, 2018

Announcement

July 25th (Wed) class cancelled. Make-up class will be on July 28th, 14:40. If you cannot attend the makeup class, please consult me in class.

Homework

Using the feedback you received from classmates and your instructor, re-write your draft #1 –> draft #2, email it to me by Friday, print it out and bring to the next class.

You may change topics if you wish.

Today’s class

  1. Distribution of Essay 1 Class Collection (for those who asked for it)
  2. Exchange draft#1 with classmates and give feedback using the feedback form on p. 55
  3. Textbook p. 58 C and Practice 10
  4. p. 60 A
  5. Handout – Sheffner’s sample Problem-solution essay


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AW2: WEEK 10, DECEMBER 15TH, 2017

Homework

Essay #5 (Response essay) draft #2:  Response + evaluation / + recommendation

(If you want my comments to your draft #1, please ask me when you email it to me.)

Today’s class

  1. For reference:
    1. Sample annotated response essay (download it here:S ample Response Essay annotated
    2. Academic Writing general reference (bilingual version): http://bit.ly/2zvyzE6 
      1. How I will grade your essays from now on: download it here (1 page) Academic Writing 2Rubric
  2. Individual conferencing

Bonus:


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AW1, Week 10, June 23rd, 2017

Homework

  • Write the outline for your Essay #2 Problem-Solution (see p 52 in the textbook for an example outline).

Today’s class

  1. Review of Queenie’s claim.
    1. You must only claim what you can support with evidence.
    2. You do not have evidence that Queenie killed Arthur so you cannot, must not claim this. You may suspect it, but without evidence you cannot claim it.
    3. However, there is evidence that Queenie is lying.  In other words, the evidence does not support her claim.
  2. Textbook p. 44 Practice 1. #2, 3, 4 and #7 on looseleaf.


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AW2 week 10 December 9th, 2016

Homework

None.

Today’s class

  1. Discussion of student responses to the Dragon Zakura episode 6. (Download the document here: dragon-zakura-responses
    1. In an academic essay, you need to make arguments.
    2. Most of the examples in the document are personal opinions, not arguments.
      1. E.g., “I like American pop music so [the method demonstrated in the Dragon Zakura episode] is best for me.”
        1. Whether you approve of the method or not is irrelevant.
    3. Some sentences are “straw man arguments“. E.g.
      1. “The test was prepared by Sakuragi. It’s unfair because he and Kawaguchi knew what kinds of questions are included.”
        1. The fact that Sakuragi chose (not “prepared”) the test does not by itself make it unfair. It would only be unfair if he had told the students about the test (he did not), or if he had taught them a certain way especially for that test. He did not, nor did Kawaguchi. Kawaguchi made his method clear (using music and movement) well before the English contest was decided.
        2. “I disagree with learning English to pass entrance exams and not for communication.”
          1. the topic is the content of the video.   In this case, the students are trying to pass an entrance exam. In the video, Sakuragi explicity states that he is not teaching students to communicate but to pass the entrance exam.
          2. Therefore, the above opinion is a straw man and is rrelevant.
          1. “Enjoying studying is important, I think.”
            1. Irrelevant. The video makes no mention of making study enjoyable a goal or purpose. The purpose is simply to prepare students to pass the English entrance exam. Therefore, this comment is a red herring.
          2. “I agree that in order to acquire English, learners should use English, because the purpose of language is to communicate.”
            1. Irrelevant. A red herring. Kawaguchi in the video does not have the students use English in order to help them communicate. In fact, Sakuragi explicity states the purpose is not communication but entrance-exam preparation. The above sentence is the writer’s personal opinion, but it is not an argument and is irrelevant to the topic.
          3. “Kawaguchi says that, when you are on a date, you don’t use difficult words. I think this is true. To acquire language we need to present our feelings (thinking).”
            1. Red herring. The final sentence is the writer’s personal opinion, but it is not supported by anything in the video. The video does not show students learning to express their feelings, nor does it discuss the importance of expressing one’s feelings, or whether or not expressing feelings is necessary in order to acquire language.
    4. Some criticisms are irrelevant because they are factually incorrect. E.g.,
      1. “Learning English while exercising is good, but it is only effective if students already have a certain basic knowledge of English.”
        1. TPR is a well known method for teaching beginners in which instructors give and demonstrate commands and movements and learners copy the movement while hearing the commands. It is therefore incorrect to say that “learning English while exercising (i.e. while moving) is only effective if students already have a basic knowledge of English.”
    5. Another logical fallacy is “poisoning the well”, (“Presenting negative information about a person before he/she speaks so as to discredit the person’s argument. “). E.g.,
      1. “Sakuragi’s opinion is too simple. His powerful voice is persuasive but one-sided.”
        1. It is true that simply by speaking loudly and passionately a person may sound persuasive without actually making any logical arguments, and in fact there is an example of this in the video (by Kawaguchi). The writer making these accusations should rather use actual quotations from the video to illustrate the points he/she is trying to make.
  2. Write a response essay to the article “Majority Rule Equals Tyranny” by Walter Williams. Download the document here:  majority-rule-equals-tyranny


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Academic Writing I, week 10 : June 24th, 2016

Makeup announcement

Makeup class will be held on Saturday July 2nd, same room as usual, same time as usual.

Homework

  • Re-write your introduction paragraph for your problem-solution essay, by hand or typed. Bring it to class next week.

Today’s class

  1. Main idea worksheets (download them here: mainideak5chalkbox  Use only pages 5-16
  2. Individual conferencing about introductory paragraph for problem-solution essay.


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Academic Writing II, week 10: December 4th, 2015

Homework:

None. Take a break. Hang loose. Chill out.

Today’s class:

  1. Proofread your own and a classmate’s essay.
    1. Suitable title? Not too vague nor too long.
    2. Double-spaced?
    3. Your name, class, professor’s name, date
      1. in either top left or top right-hand corner
      2. and on the FIRST page ONLY
      3. Bibliography or works cited list
        1. You should all have at least one: the article you wrote your response to (either the “homework” one by Alfie Kohn, or the “violent video games” one by Amanda Shaffer (no, she’s not my sister!).
        2. Any Japanese books, articles, newspapers, magazines, websites, etc., that you use should all be in Roman letters (no Chinese letters should be anywhere in your essay)
        3. No URLs, just the title of the website.
  2. Textbook: Chapter 6: Timed Essays
    1. page 1134, answer the 4 questions (on looseleaf)
    2. page 135, read the sample essay
    3. page 140, read “A”, practice 5 (directly in the textbook)
    4. page 1141, practice 6 (directly in the textbook)
  3. Checked the answers to the sample academic reading #6 “David Cameron’s porn filter”,  Sample academic reading 6 .
    1. To understand “censorship creep” in the title, you need to understand “mission creep”. Click the link to read a Japanese translation.
    2. Then answer these questions:
      1. What does “censorship creep” mean?
        1. “Censorship creep”: the question asks you to define the meaning. Many students wrote, “It means increasing censorship”, but strictly speaking, that is the result of censorship creep, not the definition of the meaning. Answer the question.
      2. What was “always the intention”, according to the article?
        1. The purpose was always “to block far more than dirty pictures”.
      3. What non-pornographic sites were also filtered?
        1. Gay and lesbian sites and sex education sites.
      4. Does the author think that a “social or moral framework” is necessary for the Internet?
        1. No. There is no ‘social or moral framework’ in a library, so why should there be one on the Internet?
      5. What is the evidence, according to the article, that pornography harms young people?
        1. There is almost no evidence (“scant”).
      6. What does the author think the real purpose of the “porn filter” is?
        1. The author thinks, or suspects, that the real purpose of the “porn filter” is not to block pornography and protect the children but “a convenient way to block a lot of content the British government doesn’t want its citizens to see” without any proper public debate and discussion about it.
      7. What do you think “extremism” means, and why does the author put it in quotation marks (“..”)?
        1. Extremism means different things to different people. However, in the case of a national law, the meaning needs to be defined clearly and publicly, so that people everywhere know exactly what is permitted and what is not. The author puts it in quotation marks (“…”) because the author suspects that the government will use the word to persuade people to accept the new law, but then expand the meaning of the word to include “content that the British government doesn’t want its citizens to see”, such as information about file sharing and free music downloads, or simply sites critical of the government. Of course, such sites will not really be extremist according to a dictionary definition.
      8. What does the author mean by “in the name of protecting children”?
        1. The author means that protecting the children may well be used as an excuse to control adult behaviour in ever increasing and surprising ways.


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Academic Writing I, week 10: June 19th, 2015

Homework:

  • Start writing your problem-solution essay & collect evidence for your claims.

Makeup class for May 1st will be July 11. Time and place will be announced later.

Today’s class:

  1. Compare essay outlines with a classmate.
  2. Look at handout #2. (You can download handout #2 here: Is_Your_Doctor_Harming_You_edt  ). Answers:
    1. Why the details about the peer edited journal, etc?
      1. They show that this article was accepted by a professional peer-reviewed journal.
      2. The details allow anyone to check this journal to see if in fact the article was published in it or not.
    2. What are the numbers in parentheses for?
      1. They refer to the references or sources of information which the writer used to write this article.
    3. What is the meaning and purpose of “References” on p. 2?
      1. They give the precise details about the sources the writer used for evidence for his article. This information allows anyone to identify and find (and read) those sources to check if what the writer says is true.
  3. If the instructor says, “It is raining now”, you can check with yoru own eyes by looking out the window or going outside. However, if the instructor says (or writes) something like this, how do you know if it is true or not?
    1. Pryor was married to Patricia Price in 1960 and divorced the following year. .[citation needed]
    2. From this marriage, a son, Richard Pryor Jr. (1961), was born.[citation needed]
  4. What kind of evidence would you want to see for these claims?
  5. Here’s an example from Wikipedia:
    1. Bob Newhart has called Pryor “the seminal comedian of the last 50 years”.[21]
      1. .[21]“Bob Newhart”. PBS American Masters.


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Academic Writing II, week 10: December 5th, 2014

Homework

None. (Yeehaw!!)

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Today’s class

  1. Read the sample response essay 2 Sample_response_essay_to_Yoshida_on_drinking_age  and write a response to it. Don’t forget to add the reference.
  2. Read a classmate’s essay and write a response to it. Don’t forget to add the reference.

 


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