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Academic Writing I – week 7, June 1st, 2012

Today’s class:

  • Here are the opening lines of some famous English novels.
  • Which one do you like best? Have you read any of these books? If so, which one(s)?
  1. “This is the saddest story I have ever heard.” The Good Soldier by Ford Madox Ford.
  2. “Call me Ishmael.” Moby Dick by Herman Melville
  3. “… the first thing you’ll probably want to know is where I was born and what my lousy childhood was like… and all that David Copperfield kind of crap, but I don’T feel like going into it.” Catcher in the Rye by J.D. Salinger.
  4. “The past is a a foreign country. They do things differently there.” The Go-Between by L.P. Hartley.
  5. “Hale knew they meant to murder him before he had been in Brighton three hours.” Brighton Rock by Graham Greene.
  6. “You are about to begin reading Italo Calvino’s  new novel If on a winter’s night a traveller.” If on a winter’s night a traveller by Italo Calvino.
  • Read in the textbook p. 26 (“Transitions”) and p. 27 (“Because” and “however”).
  • p. 34, Practice 16; p. 35 Practice 17; p. 36 Practice 18; p. 37 Practice 19; p. 38 Practice 20.


  • If you were absent, of if you did not finish in class, do the exercises in the textbook above.
  • Bring your essay (latest draft) to class next week.


Academic Writing I – week 6, May 25th, 2012

Today’s report is by Ms. Kamioka.

  • We learned how to make good conclusion, and did in textbook practice 14,15 on page 31.
  • We checked the second draft of our own essay with peer feedback form on page 33, and teacher’s comment.
  • We rewrote our essay, added a ‘hook’ and a good conclusion etc.


Re-write essay (third draft) in Microsoft Word, and e-mail it to Mr. Sheffner, by Wednesday May 30, midnight (23:59).


Here are some suggestions for types of “hooks” to begin your essay with; from “Ana, the Writer Today“‘s blog. Do you know any websites with good tips for writing? Whether they are in Japanese or in English, why not share them with your classmates by leaving a comment?

10 Writing Hooks

Writing Class Notes: Beginning Hooks – Strategies to use to catch your reader’s attention

1. Begin with a simile or a metaphor.
My life has been a carnival. My family is like an open book.

2. Begin with a question.
Who is the greatest athlete of all times?

3. Begin with a definition.
Amiable is the best way to describe my personality: I am friendly and caring. Perfect is the best adjective to describe me: I am flawless in every aspect of my life.

4. Begin with a quotation.
“Learn to laugh” is something my kindergarten teacher told me after Ralph Thorsen spilled paint on my daffodil picture.

5. Begin with a comparison to a well-known person or celebrity.
I am as photogenic as Tyra Banks.

6. Begin with placing yourself in the future.
In the year 2012 I see myself as a supreme ballerina performing in Camelot at the Kennedy Center in Washington, D.C.

7. Begin with a dilemma.
Deciding to attend Hampton Roads Academy, a private school, was one of my most difficult decisions.

8. Begin with a scene.
The day of my birth began with Hurricane Charlie pounding at our door in Charleston, South Carolina.

9. Begin with the best advice you have ever received.
“Butch, did you practice the piano?” Since I was six years old, this has been a daily reminder from my dear mother. “Be all you can be” has been my inspiration from my grandfather who is a retired Marine Corps colonel and my mentor.

10. Begin with an anecdote.
As my cousin and I pedaled our new bikes to the beach, 6 years old, suntanned and young, we met an old, shaggy-haired man weaving unsteadily on a battered old bike.