We learned how to make good conclusion, and did in textbook practice 14,15 on page 31.
We checked the second draft of our own essay with peer feedback form on page 33, and teacher’s comment.
We rewrote our essay, added a ‘hook’ and a good conclusion etc.
Re-write essay (third draft) in Microsoft Word, and e-mail it to Mr. Sheffner, by Wednesday May 30, midnight (23:59).
Here are some suggestions for types of “hooks” to begin your essay with; from “Ana, the Writer Today“‘s blog. Do you know any websites with good tips for writing? Whether they are in Japanese or in English, why not share them with your classmates by leaving a comment?
Writing Class Notes: Beginning Hooks – Strategies to use to catch your reader’s attention
1. Begin with a simile or a metaphor. My life has been a carnival. My family is like an open book.
2. Begin with a question. Who is the greatest athlete of all times?
3. Begin with a definition. Amiable is the best way to describe my personality: I am friendly and caring. Perfect is the best adjective to describe me: I am flawless in every aspect of my life.
4. Begin with a quotation. “Learn to laugh” is something my kindergarten teacher told me after Ralph Thorsen spilled paint on my daffodil picture.
5. Begin with a comparison to a well-known person or celebrity. I am as photogenic as Tyra Banks.
6. Begin with placing yourself in the future. In the year 2012 I see myself as a supreme ballerina performing in Camelot at the Kennedy Center in Washington, D.C.
7. Begin with a dilemma. Deciding to attend Hampton Roads Academy, a private school, was one of my most difficult decisions.
8. Begin with a scene. The day of my birth began with Hurricane Charlie pounding at our door in Charleston, South Carolina.
9. Begin with the best advice you have ever received. “Butch, did you practice the piano?” Since I was six years old, this has been a daily reminder from my dear mother. “Be all you can be” has been my inspiration from my grandfather who is a retired Marine Corps colonel and my mentor.
10. Begin with an anecdote. As my cousin and I pedaled our new bikes to the beach, 6 years old, suntanned and young, we met an old, shaggy-haired man weaving unsteadily on a battered old bike.
Today’s report is by Ms. Ishihara. Today, we skipped the sections about outlining. I said that hardly anyone actually uses outlines. However, it may be useful to you to know how to do this, so I will go over this part briefly next week.
We checked the homework.
We did in the textbook chapter 1, section A, Practice 4 & 5 p.22, section E, Practice 9, 11 p.27~28, section F, Practice 12, p.28~29.
We read section E “Use transitions”, p.26~27.
We corrected the errors and added more lines in our essay.
Re-write your essay (second draft) in Microsoft Word, and e-mail it to Mr. Sheffner, by Wednesday May 23rd, midnight (23:59).
Document titles and E-mail subjects are “AW Essay Ⅰ Second draft My Name”.