Academic Writing I, week 12: July 3rd, 2015



Today’s class

  1. Read your classmates’ essays and comment on
    1. the thesis statement – does it include the problem and a summary of the solution?
    2. the evidence – are there references for the claims made?
    3. conclusion – does it repeat the problem and solution(s)?
    4. the hook – is there one? Is it a good one?
  2. Thinking critically. It is important, although difficult, to think critically about your solution. Consider the solution of more and stricter gun control laws in the United States as a solution to the problem of mass shootings, such as the recent one in Charleston, South Carolina. Can you think of reasons why this might not solve the problem?
    1. Stricter gun control laws will make it more difficult for all people to obtain a gun for self-defence.
    2. Criminals can always get guns. They are not deterred by laws. The shooter in Charleston recently did not buy his gun in a gun shop – he stole it! Therefore, even if gun control laws were already stricter, it would not have prevented this case from happening.
    3. Therefore, stricter gun control laws will probably not solve the problem of mass shootings.
  3. President Obama has asked for body cameras for police after the shooting by police of unarmed Michael Brown in Ferguson last year (reference: “Obama Requests $263 Million for Police Body Cameras, Training”, NBC News, Dec. 1, 2014. Accessed July 10, 2015). Can you think of reasons why this might not solve the problem?
    1. Cameras can break down.
    2. Video can be easily edited.
    3. More severe punishment for police shootings, and more prosecutions would be more effective and also cheaper.

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