Academic Writing I, week 11: June 26th, 2015


Make-up class will be Sat. July 11th, 5th period (16:10 – 17:40).


Finish writing your problem-solution essay, paying attention to the following points. The essay should be typed in proper academic format, printed out and brought to the next class.

  • the conclusion (read p. 53 “The Conclusion”)
  • the introduction:
    • is there a hook to make the reader interested in reading more?
    • is there a description of the problem?
    • is the thesis statement argumentative, concise and capable of being supported?
    • does the thesis statement mention the solution?
  • Is there evidence to support the claims?
  • Is the solution logically sound?
    • Is the problem properly analyzed, and does the solution solve the problem?
  • Does the writer avoid sweeping statements by using appropriate hedging?
  • Does the writer us a semi-formal voice?
  • Is the point-of-view third person, or does the essay rely too much on personal experience and opinions?
  • Is there a list of references?

Today’s class

  1. Tim Gallwey’s PLE model (Performance, Learning, Enjoyment). See Gallwey, W. Timothy. (2000). The Inner Game of Work. New York: Random House. ISBN 0-375-50007-3.
  2. Free-writing: 5 minutes on how you feel today, now.
  3. In small groups, read each others’ essays and comment on the evidence.
  4. Textbook pp 53-4, Practice 8
  5. P. 57, Practice 9. What is wrong with Introduction A? What rule of academic writing does it violate?
  6. Thinking critically. It is important, although difficult, to think critically about your solution. Consider the solution of more and stricter gun control laws in the United States as a solution to the problem of mass shootings, such as the recent one in Charleston, South Carolina. Can you think of reasons why this might not solve the problem? (Reference: “We do know that once again, innocent people were killed in part because someone who wanted to inflict harm had no trouble getting their hands on a gun,” Obama said at the White House. “At some point, we as a country will have to reckon with the fact that this kind of mass violence does not happen in other advanced countries. It doesn’t happen in other places with this kind of frequency. It is in our power to do something about it.” Obama: ‘Senseless murders’ in church shooting – Web. Accessed 2015-06-26.)
  7. Avoid sweeping statements by using hedging expressions, in order to be as accurate as possible, and to make statements that can be supported by evidence.
    1. Textbook pp. 58-9 Practice 10
    2. P. 61, Practice 11 and 12.

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