Finish your final draft of your 2nd essay, the persuasive essay, and bring it to class on Friday November 30th (there is no class next Friday, Nov. 23rd). Write or type your essay using double space, so as to allow room for others to leave comments.
Continue writing and editing your draft for your persuasive essay. Writing and editing should not be done at the same time; Ayn Rand wrote that these two activities are mutually incompatible (see “The Art of Non-Fiction“). Find someone you trust to read and give you feedback on your drafts before you write your final one.
I spoke with all students present today and discussed their compare and contrast essay.
Some general points:
The best essays gave the reader some new, fresh or interesting information. E.g. some names (e.g. “Benezet“), figures (e.g. the area of Kansai University), or some unique personal experience, such as learning math again as an adult.
Many essays, unfortunately, did not tell the reader anything new, but repeated tired old knowledge that most readers already knew. Give the reader something new, something fresh, something unique, something original, something interesting. Please!
All essays were well written in terms of formatting, and only a few had grammar or syntax or vocabulary problems that interfered with comprehension.
I did not correct minor errors of grammar, vocab and syntax, unless they interfered with comprehension.
Many essay titles were rather vague: you want to tell the reader quickly what your essay will be about. The title is a good way to do that. A title like “Universities” is too broad and does not tell the reader what to expect.
Freewriting 2: same but for a neighbour: edit your freewriting #1 to create a piece of writing that you would be happy to let your neighbour in class read (or write something completely new, or mix the two, it’s up to you)
Freewriting 3: same but for whole class – edit your freewriting #2 (if necessary, if you want to) to create a piece of writing that could be read by the whole class.
Freewriting 4: how did your writing change? Did it change? Which was easier to write? Which was most interesting to read?
Get back your last week’s papers
Random groups of 5-6 students: share your list of possible topics, then say which one you chose & why. Make suggestions, ask questions, give feedback.
Changed your mind about topic? If so, change it now.
Each person told the whole class about their topic ( title only, not reasons)
Freewriting 5: about today’s class.
Hmwk:Comparison/contrast essay draft #1 – don’t worry about format, or grammar, or spelling. These can be dealt with later.