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AW1, Week 6, May 26th, 2017

Homework

    • Watch the following videos to learn about
      • claims
      • reasons
      • evidence
    • Video 1  Parts of an argument. https://youtu.be/04UA2YwDpc4
    • Video 2: Making a claim. https://youtu.be/5-tOeh8n8yQ
    • Optional  Video 3 : Bullets vs Prince Rupert Drops. https://youtu.be/CaYq9sX4zLs#t=1m16s This is about a visit to the Royal Society in London to see the original 17th century records of scientists Robert Moray, Robert Hook and Prince Rupert. This was the beginning of academic writing!Watch these videos and take notes about
    • After today’s textbook exercises and mini-lecture and watching the above videos, write your 3rd and final draft of your Explanatory essay and
    • email it to me by Wednesday midnight
    • print it out and bring it to class next week.

Today’s class

  1. Mini-lecture on what is an argument?
  2. Review of textbook points covered last time
    1. p. 21  A Thesis statement
    2. p.26  E – Transitions
      1. As a rule, don’t begin a sentence with “And” or “But”.
    3. p. 27 Because and Therefore
      1. “Because” can only begin a subordinate clause (従属節) in English, and so cannot stand alone. It must be part of a  longer sentence which has a main clause (主節). E.g.
        1. X “Because I want to see Niagara Falls.”
        2. 0  “I want to go to the U.S., because I want to see Niagara Falls.”
    4. p. p. 29 Hooks
  3. Then we read p. 30 G – Write a conclusion
    1. p. 21 Practice 14 and 15
    2. p. 34 B – Title your essay and Practice 16.

 

 


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AW2 week 6, November 11th, 2016

Homework

  1. If you have not already done so, please email me your essay #4 ASAP (As Soon As Possible). This is already one week overdue.
  2. Please read and respond to this  Wikipedia article: America_First_Committee  
    (You can download a PDF version here: america-first-committee )

    1. Give the title and reference (source, date, etc) for this article.
    2. Summarize the main points of the article.
      1. You can use direct quotes or your own words. A combination of both is often used.
    3. Give your evaluation:
      1. Is it true, i.e. is it factually correct? Is the article reliable? Why (not)?
      2. Is the article well written? Why (not)?
      3. Other (but avoid giving your opinion about the content of the article).

Today’s class

  1. Discuss in groups what you read or watched for homework.
  2. Today is Armistice Day in Europe. Red poppies are often worn on this day.
  3. Textbook chapter 5. Read page 111
  4. Practice 1,p. 114, questions 2, 4 and 5 ONLY (answers on looseleaf).
  5. Read these quotes from the British newspaper “The Independent” and ask some critical questions:
    1. The newspaper front page the sums up Europe’s reaction to Trump victory. One French newspaper dubbed the President-elect ‘American Psycho’.
    2. French newspaper Liberation called Mr. Trump ‘American Psycho’ – a reference to the book and film about a murderous stockbroker.

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Academic Writing I, week 6: May 27th, 2016

Homework

Today was the deadline for Essay 1. If you have not already done so, please email me your final essay.

Please use the following format for your file name:

AW1_Essay1_Final_<Family Name>

Obviously, replace <Family Name> with your own name. If your name is Yamada, please add your initial, as there are 3 Yamadas in this class.

Today’s class

  1. Common Errors (ownload and read the AW1 Essay1 Common Errors file here: AW1_Essay1_Common_Errors)
    1. Read the example sentences and re-write #13, #26, #32, #46.
  2. Explanation of non-sequitur logical fallacy ( 不合理な推論 )
  3. Mini-lecture: Origin of academic writing – the trivium (interestingly, there is no Japanese Wikipedia page for this entry; would you like to write one?
  4. Mini-lecture 2: how to investigate a topic – a model example
    1. Pay close attention to the actual words used
    2. Define the key words:
      1. If the original material has a definition, check it.
      2. If the original material does not have a definition, search for it yourself.
    3. What possible next steps could you take in this investigation?
      1. Define “virus”
      2. Investigate what exactly is the connection between the virus and microcephaly
      3. What other possible causes for microcephaly are there?

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Academic Writing I, week 6: May 22nd, 2015

Homework:

None. If you did not hand in your essay today, email it to me today.

Makeup class for May 1st will be either July 11 or 18th (both Saturdays). If you have any preference, please let me know before next Thursday.

Visit www.goodreads.com. Do you know a good book-sharing online website like this? If so, please introduce it to me (in comments or by email).

Today’s class:

  1. In groups of 4/5 read each other’s essays.
  2. Textbook p. 29 “Hooks” – read.
  3. Conventions in English academic writing
    1. Conventions are rules like driving on the left side of the road.  Different countries/cultures have different conventions. They are neither better nor worse. There is no “correct” convention. It’s just a rule that everyone agrees to obey when they write academic English.
    2. One convention (in English academic writing) is that the main purpose or point of the essay should be clearly expressed in the first (introductory) paragraph, and developed in detail in the following paragraphs.
    3. Another convention is that the conclusion repeats the information in the introductory paragraphy and does not introduce any new information.
  4. Look again at your essay.
    1. Did you write a good hook?
    2. Does your introductory paragraphy include the thesis?
    3. Does your conclusion repeat the information in the introduction? A conclusion in English does not contain any new information (this may be different from Japanese writing conventions).
  5. Handout: which sentence does not belong in these two paragraphs?
  6. Re-arrange the sentences in this paragraph.

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Academic Writing II, week 6: November 7th, 2014

Homework

Email me your persuasive essay as soon as possible.

Today’s class

  1. Write your own essay as a bibliography entry using MLA style:
    1. Author (Family name, Given name). “Essay Title”. Academic Writing Vol. 2. 2014 pp
  2. Read a classmate’s essay and
    1. identify his/her thesis statement.
    2. His/her thesis statement is (not) in the introduction.
    3. Body paragraph 1 uses __________ support (see textbook page 101 for types of support)
    4. Body paragraph 2 uses __________ support.
    5. Body paragraph 3 uses  __________ support
    6. The writer’s strongest argument is (that), ” ….. “
    7. The writers weakest argument is (that), “…..”
    8. Can you think of an argument that the writer did not use? Write it here.
    9. Any other comments.
  3. Free writing: write about a song, play, movie, novel, picture, TV show that you like and which you have listened to, seen, watched, read, looked at or watched more than once.
    1. What are its key characteristics?
    2. Why do you like it?

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Academic Writing I, week 6: May 23rd, 2014

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Homework:

  1. If you did not hand in your essay today for some reason, email it to me without delay.
  2. Make a list of 10 problems that
  • are relevant to you personally
  • you have a strong opinion about
  • might be interesting for your academic reader

Today’s class:

  1. Free writing 1: free topic, 5 minutes
  2. Free writing 2: describe your imaginary academic reader
  3. In groups of 4~5, students read each other’s essays .
  4. Textbook exercises:
    1. p. 45 D and Practice 2
    2. p. 346 Your Turn and Practice 3
  5. Some suggestions from Sheffner for further reading:
    1. Any essay by Francis Bacon (1561 – 1626)
    2. The essay collection “The Periodic Table” by chemist and Holocaust survivor Primo Levi (1919 – 1987)
    3. Capitalism and individualism are two closely related and vitally important concepts in Western civilization, and both of them are often not well understood even by Westerners. To understand these important ideas but without studying a lot of boring philosophy books, I recommend 2 novels by Russian-American writer Ayn Rand :”The Fountainhead” 「水源」for learning about individualism and libertarianism, and “Atlas Shrugged” 「肩をすくめるアトラス for learning about capitalism. I also recommend her non-fiction essays but I think only a few have been translated into Japanese. One of them is “Philosophy: Who Needs It”  and the Japanese translation is here: 哲学:誰がそれを必要とするのか?( (Here is a rather long and boring video review in Japanese about “The Fountainhead”): httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7H8b_eiBpY8

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Academic Writing II – week 6, November 8th, 2013

Homework:

None. Today was the deadline for essay #1: problem-solution essay. If you were absent today, email me your essay today or tomorrow. Overdue essays may not receive correction or feedback.

Today’s class:

  1. Read classmates’ essays
  2. Give feedback using the form on p. 105
  3. Write the outline for your essay (see p. 102)
  4. p. 100 Practice 5
  5. p. 101 Practice 6
  6. p. 103-4 Practice 7

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Academic Writing I – week 6, May 24th, 2013

Homework:

 

I will send all students for whom I have an email address, an invitation to a Dropbox folder. If you have trouble sending me your document, you can try uploading your document to the Dropbox folder (you do not need a Dropbox account, login or ID to do this).

If you did not receive an email from me, please email me immediately.

 Today’s class:

  1. Sheffner’s academic essay writing comments. You can download these pearls of wisdom as a PDF here: Comments on Essay1 This file is also available in the Dropbox folder “Essay 1 Explanatory” which you can access once you accept the invitation which has been sent to you by email.
  2. Essays returned with comments.
  3. Homework checked (p. 27 Practice 9, 10 & 11)
  4. Read p. 29 “Hooks”
  5. Answer the questions on p. 30 Practice 13, p. 31 Practice 14 + 15

 

 


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Academic Writing II – week 6, November 9th, 2012

  1. Read your essay aloud to yourself
  2. Random groups of 4/6: read each others’ essays & comment
  3. Freewriting#1:
    1. makeup availability;
    2. What makes a “good” essay”
    3. How could you improve your essay?
    4. Was it useful to read others essays? Why/why not?
    5. Did you like to read comments on your essay? What kind of comments were most useful?
  4. A bit of research might be needed to improve your essay.
  5. Textbook ch 4 p. 94 how to choose a topic
  6. P. 95 choose a topic: make your own list; compare lists with your neighbours.
  7. Homework:
    1. If you typed your essay, email it to me.
    2. Read sample essay in textbook pp91-2
    3. Make a short list of topics for your next essay (persuasive essay).


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Academic Writing I – week 6, May 25th, 2012

Today’s report is by Ms. Kamioka.

  • We learned how to make good conclusion, and did in textbook practice 14,15 on page 31.
  • We checked the second draft of our own essay with peer feedback form on page 33, and teacher’s comment.
  • We rewrote our essay, added a ‘hook’ and a good conclusion etc.

Homework

Re-write essay (third draft) in Microsoft Word, and e-mail it to Mr. Sheffner, by Wednesday May 30, midnight (23:59).

Bonus:

Here are some suggestions for types of “hooks” to begin your essay with; from “Ana, the Writer Today“‘s blog. Do you know any websites with good tips for writing? Whether they are in Japanese or in English, why not share them with your classmates by leaving a comment?

10 Writing Hooks


Writing Class Notes: Beginning Hooks – Strategies to use to catch your reader’s attention

1. Begin with a simile or a metaphor.
My life has been a carnival. My family is like an open book.

2. Begin with a question.
Who is the greatest athlete of all times?

3. Begin with a definition.
Amiable is the best way to describe my personality: I am friendly and caring. Perfect is the best adjective to describe me: I am flawless in every aspect of my life.

4. Begin with a quotation.
“Learn to laugh” is something my kindergarten teacher told me after Ralph Thorsen spilled paint on my daffodil picture.

5. Begin with a comparison to a well-known person or celebrity.
I am as photogenic as Tyra Banks.

6. Begin with placing yourself in the future.
In the year 2012 I see myself as a supreme ballerina performing in Camelot at the Kennedy Center in Washington, D.C.

7. Begin with a dilemma.
Deciding to attend Hampton Roads Academy, a private school, was one of my most difficult decisions.

8. Begin with a scene.
The day of my birth began with Hurricane Charlie pounding at our door in Charleston, South Carolina.

9. Begin with the best advice you have ever received.
“Butch, did you practice the piano?” Since I was six years old, this has been a daily reminder from my dear mother. “Be all you can be” has been my inspiration from my grandfather who is a retired Marine Corps colonel and my mentor.

10. Begin with an anecdote.
As my cousin and I pedaled our new bikes to the beach, 6 years old, suntanned and young, we met an old, shaggy-haired man weaving unsteadily on a battered old bike.


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